peer review - 20523최영민

GradeAccording to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay? Why?
3 points. well constructed and persuasive.

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
-Little more specific refutation.

ThesisWhat is the thesis?
-Football can give positive impacts to society and this is undoubtedly true.

Is the thesis clear and debatable?
-It is clear, but I can not find what the negative impacts of the Football except injury.
(I mean that the thesis is very new to me but I wonder this thesis is debatable.)

If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
-Football ultimately makes society and people happy.

Any other thoughts?
- No. Great.

Classical ArgumentCan you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
- Yes.

Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis?
-I am one of the person who has not that much interest on the football but his introduction was intersting enough to grab my attention. Also it comfortably lead to the thesis.

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?
-Of course. I had never known that what FIFA does for the people, now I got it.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
-All the reasons and supportings are agreeable. Made me nodding my head.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner?
-I don't think. He already mentioned many positive impacts of the football and I want to know why some people do not think like him.

Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis?
-yes.

What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?
-Nothing.

Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
-Agreed but not much.

When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
-Agreed and knew several valid reasons.

If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
-The articulation part.

How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?
-Improve the refutation part. I want to know the opposites opinion more.

Research
Is the author using research effectively?
-Yes.

Is the research from appropriate sources?
-Yes.

Are the sources obvious?
-Yeap.

Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
-Strongly.

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?
-I don't have~